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What the Body Means by *b1gfan:iconb1gfan:





What the Body Means


He seems a creature
bent to half its height,

the likeness of a burden
roughed out in oils

honey-gold and hung
between rising and falling

as he makes a seat untaken
atop the red along the curb –

his twice-jacketed arms
pushing palms against eyes

cast by glare into retreat.
In the bite of early sunshine

he seems to doze
as proof of what the body means.
©2008-2009 *b1gfan
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Author's Comments

-or-

What A Body Means


He seems a shape
bent to half its height,

a likeness of the soul
roughed out in copal oils

and hung between
its rising and its falling.

And as he makes a seat untaken
atop the red along the curb,

his arms, twice-jacketed,
push palms against eyes

cast by glare into retreat,
and he seems to drowse

in the bite of early sunshine
as proof of what a body means.

-or-

What A Body Means


I feel no more than a shape
bent down to half its height,

a likeness of the soul
roughed out in copal oils

and hung between
my rising and my falling.

And as I make a seat untaken
atop the red along the curb,

my arms, twice-jacketed,
push palms against eyes

cast by glare into retreat,
and I begin I think to drowse

in the bite of early sunshine
as proof of what a body means.


It's so hard to choose
Dave Prisk

The preview image is a wonderful little bit of fun from Wordle. You enter texts and it makes word clouds from what you enter - you can try it here [link] :)

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:iconpumpkin-frog:
They are all equally beautiful.

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""How do you say 'bring me sausage and eggs or I'll slit your throat' in Italian?"
"Look it up in the phrase book." "
— Regina Doman (Black as Night: A Fairy Tale Retold)
:iconr-mitchell:
i like how you let us read all three choices. it's 3D poetry :D
:iconvindicta38:
Nice, letting us see all three poems... Kinda like seeing all aspects of someone's creative process...

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Words do my bidding! ....... Sometimes...
:iconblueskye27:
So, how did you decide which one to use?
:iconandromedaii:
They're all beautiful. Too bad you can't put up all three.
:iconintelligentsiaillum:
Man..you have got talent

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:iconamynnah49:
i like "creature" better than shape, but the first - person one is great too.

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:iconoldest-boy:
"the likeness of a burden
roughed out in oils"

:clap:

good golly, dave.

--
'SHARKS DON'T SLEEP' a collection of poems by Eric Hamilton.
:iconasthenightmoves:
I'm really digging the shape one, but the one that says "I feel no more than a shape" makes more of a mark on me. ;] very nice Dave!

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