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Trials


Swallowed early by a wolf,
she carved her freedom from the red
hunger of wild muscle,
and later,
                with raucous giants
closing ground, her agile fingers
fashioned straw into the finest possible
passage home.

Beset by poverty and suitors,
she stopped her ears and took to rambling
high the mossy hills and low
the roads to sea, until two unnetted fishes
gave, as recompense for her kindness,
a clutch of wishes disguised as simple sticks –
enough to topple kings and lovers
over-eager –
                     wealth which held well into
the ease of age until, starving in his lust,
her rejections taught a traveling prince
to taste the sugar of desert dates.

Egunguns and Tengu tamed,
Maiden Liu and Hiiaka met well,
so many years fulfilled,
and still a ghost begs justice
be brought to him as a garnet ring
and set inside his broken bones,
desperate that she speak
the secrets under the floorboards
unblushing,
                    and still her father
schemes to spend her life
in payment for the patter of rain across
barren clay, to fatten goats on summer grass
until the wolf comes
                             for her again.
©2008-2009 *b1gfan
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Just thinking about folktales and all ... I've been reading tales from Jane Yolen's book Fearless Girls, Wise Women & Beloved Sisters: Heroines in Folktales from Around the World, as I do from time to time, and that got me soaking up the imagery and experience of the world's women and the cycle of it all and how that relates to lives today ... and all .. you know...and all

I tend to think it's just like Edna St. Vincent Millay said, “It is not true that life is one damn thing after another – it’s one damn thing over and over again.”

The preview image, The Battle and the Balance, is by the very talented Giuliana, who goes by the name PoetaTriste here on dA. She was kind enough to let me add her image to the poem! :headbang:

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I encourage all to check her work out here :iconpoetatriste:
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That came together rather nicely.
What's so great about this piece is that even the fairy tales that are unfamiliar echo with power and meaning. You're captured the universal feel of allegory here, and you've done it magnificently. :clap:

And hooray for Edna!
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^_^ thanks Cindy...I found the big challenge of the poem to trying to develop it in such a way that the particular tales of folktales people might not be very familiar with wouldn't take over as the main focus. That would kill it of course. Oh, and to not get unintentionally preachy in the selection of trials and experiences...that would kill it too! =) I so wanted not to kill it...as you can tell I'm sure. :hug:
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Then you were wonderfully success because you breathed it full of vibrant life...
I have that book on my shelf. I'm looking at it right now. My favorite was always the one about the woman who followed the dead man through things that should kill her. Must be the romantic in me.

On your piece: the opening stanza is amazing! "Swallowed early by a wolf, she carved her freedom from the red hunger of wild muscle." Wow! :D
Wow. All I can say is...great job! :clap:
You have rekindled in me a love for fairy tales. :)

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Thanks...of the original haiku I wrote when I started the piece (in my journal) that was my favorite for sure. =)

I'm so glad you have that collection - It's really great!
That is high praise - I am humbled and happy =)

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