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Sixteen Dead in Juarez


We can't talk. We can't
talk now. Now,
like the living, we are
dead in Juarez –
unsolved as the grave
streets that turned us
indoors until, hidden
inside, the hiding ended
with the blood we were.

It seems a mistake, false
information, a confusion
of something; they could not want
anyone like us. Who can see
why they might – they did
not know our hands as we left
them, dark and plain, beside
bullet holes in a wall.

What is this smell in the air?
Where is the world
where the world is?
Why is this? We can't
talk now.
The New York Daily News reported it this way:

Gunmen Kill 13 Students at Party in Mexico Border City; False Information Prompted Attack

CIUDAD JUAREZ, Mexico - Armed men stormed a party in this violent Mexican border city, killing 13 high school and college students in what witnesses said they thought was an attack prompted by false information.

About two dozen teens and young adults were hospitalized after the late Saturday assault in Ciudad Juarez, a drug cartel-plagued city which is one of the deadliest in the world.

Grieving witnesses and family members told The Associated Press on Sunday they thought the victims, mostly residents of the housing complex where the attack occurred, had no ties to drug traffickers.


You can read more about it here: Gunman Kill 13 Students

Ken Ellingwood at The L.A. Times had this to say:

Ciudad Juarez Police Baffled by Shooting of Teens

The attack on a party attended by mostly high school and college students has 'no apparent motive,' the mayor says. The death toll rises to 16.

Reporting from Mexico City - Authorities in Ciudad Juarez said Monday that they have no idea what motivated a weekend shooting attack against a group of young partygoers that killed at least 16 people in the border city.

The death toll rose from 14 after two more victims died Monday from wounds suffered during the assault, in which gunmen in seven vehicles sealed off the street and opened fire on a party packed with teenagers. More than a dozen people were wounded during the attack around midnight Saturday.

The majority of the dead were under 20, and most were high school or college students.


More here: Ciudada Juarez Police Baffled

I've been away a long time; the world is still the same. What can we say about that.

Dave Prisk
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dictionarychemist Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2010
This is brilliantly worded and so fluent, it strikes everything just perfectly. Excellent job, I particularly loved the beginning:

We can't talk. We can't
talk now. Now,
like the living, we are
dead in Juarez –


It's just powerful in evoking every emotion that I feel for this country. You did an excellent job of representing the struggle and I sincerely applaud. Great work.
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b1gfan Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2010  Student Writer
:hug: Thank you my friend. I really appreciate your willingness to stop by and read the poem :tighthug: And then to give it a :+fav: as well - :wow: Thanks again my dear.
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dictionarychemist Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2010
It's my pleasure.
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suan-la-tang Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2010  Student Writer
Moving and tragic. This is a great write about a horrible, unspeakably terrible situation in Mexico.

Thanks for writing this. Someone has to.
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b1gfan Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2010  Student Writer
Thank you my friend :highfier: I really appreciate your taking the time to read and the comment is a lil bit of wonderful. Thanks very much!
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KneelingGlory Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2010
Featured here! Beautiful work :)
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b1gfan Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2010  Student Writer
:hug: Oh Lili - you are the sweetest! :heart: Thank you. :)
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KneelingGlory Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2010
they did
not know our hands as we left
them, dark and plain, beside
bullet holes in a wall.


The sad part is I have to wonder if it would matter if they had. Excellent piece, Dave. :+fav:
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b1gfan Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2010  Student Writer
:hug: Thank you so much Lili :) It's such a sad situation - the kind where I could feel the writing rising up inside as I learned about what'd happened. It means a lot to me that you enjoyed it as much as you did. Thanks for reading my friend :heart: and for the :+fav: as well.
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marije5chip Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Loved it!
Especially the first strophe really made me picture it.
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b1gfan Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2010  Student Writer
:hug: Thank you Marije :D I am delighted to hear that it you enjoy the poem. That you like it enough to :+fav: is icing on my li'l cake! :heart: (or should I say :cake:)
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marije5chip Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
:hug: it's always nice to read your poetry :)
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b1gfan Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2010  Student Writer
Oh, you are too sweet :hug:
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marije5chip Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
:)
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NMRedChile Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2010
Hey, there, friend!

Terrific. Really hits the nerve.

As a central-New Mexican, Juarez was the place for college impulse trips and family weekends. Now, a lot of years later, few go down there; it's become too dangerous, primarily owing to drug cartels.

(In my Mature Content section, you might want to see "Show por los Americanos" - wrote it in my 30s about an experienece in my v. early 20s re Juarez & the poverty that fuels the whole scene.
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b1gfan Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2010  Student Writer
Thank you Candace - I can't begin to tell you how much I value the time you share with me in reading and commenting. The fate of Juarez is an incredibly sad and frightening one and, living as close to it as you do - it must be rough to have lost such a place and its memories because of all the violence there...

I love your poem Show por los Americanos! A :+fav: for sure as it tells the hard story of real suffering with it's teeth bared - dazzling white, but sharp and keen to bite!
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j-krumweed Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
The way you worded this aids in expressing the senseless futility of what you're describing. Especially in the second stanza.

It seems a mistake, false
information, a confusion
of something; they could not want
anyone like us. Who can see
why they might – they did
not know our hands as we left
them, dark and plain, beside
bullet holes in a wall.


Brilliant piece.
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b1gfan Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2010  Student Writer
Many thanks my buddy! I value your feedback tremendously and I really appreciate your taking the time to read as suportively as you always do. :manhug: You rock - truly. :D

And if that were not enough I must share a heartfelt thank you for the :+fav: as well.
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j-krumweed Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
You are very welcome, my friend.
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licoricefactory Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2010
I LOVE THE ENDING. I love your poems actually and how you make them from news articles. It's awesome. You're so talented.
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b1gfan Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2010  Student Writer
I'm just trying to connect to my world is all :) and I think you're awesome (so there)! :D

Oh, and before I totally forget like an ungrateful poo - thank you very much for the :+fav: on this poem Colleen :D That is suuuupa sweet of you.

:glomp:
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licoricefactory Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2010
You're welcome :glomp:
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NJKay Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2010
A powerful poem but I wonder if it couldn't have had more power in it. The ending seems a little iffy to me. However I do love that line in the second stanza. "Who can see why they might – they did not know our hands as we left them, dark and plain, beside bullet holes in a wall."
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b1gfan Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2010  Student Writer
:D
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TheDaysOfRain Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2010
I love how you write things that are relevant to the news. Powerful. =)
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b1gfan Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2010  Student Writer
You are too kind my friend :D Thank you so much for reading and sharing your thoughts :hug:
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TheDaysOfRain Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2010
It was a powerful write. Really great. =D
You're most welcome and it was my pleasure. :hug:
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pseudometry Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2010   Writer
Nice: captures the confusion, the details, the tension, the abrupt chain of events. Great appeal to the sense too, and I love the opening and closing lines:

We can't talk. We can't
talk now.

Where is the world
where the world is?
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b1gfan Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2010  Student Writer
Thank you Jamie. I delight in every word of that response; it is a music rare and wonderful. :D :highfive:
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pseudometry Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2010   Writer
It's my pleasure Dave :)
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SAYFE Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2010
gggFUCK! i love the second stanza! It's so sad, i love that you usually write about other people or scenarios that just seem to hook people.
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b1gfan Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2010  Student Writer
:D Thank you my friend! :) I am thrilled to know you like the poem.

You're so right - I've noticed that I do tend to be drawn to writing material that considers the lives and conditions of others. I think the experience of looking at people critically but with empathy is one way to know yourself better, to see what life is by opening yourself up to the touch of others lives.

:highfive: Thanks for sharing and reading and being a great bud!

:D
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SAYFE Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2010
AWW THO CONTHIDERATE YOU ARE!! :P
no problemo..^^
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EnkaOwakura Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2010
Sensitive topic for me, it's my country, and justice will never be done.

The repetition of the first phrase (We can't talk) in the first two verses was the perfect start for this poem. It evokes the feeling of disatisfaction and anger that has been left upon the witnesses of these kind of crimes. It is true this things happen everyday, and it's certainly this kind of silence expressed in the poem that has envolved the entire country the last years (decades?).

Damn, makes me want to scream.
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b1gfan Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2010  Student Writer
:hug: I am screaming with you - it is an outrage in every sense of that word. :hug:

Thank you so much for reading and sharing so generously my friend.
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PoetaTriste Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2010
yes, the flow chops, it's tense, it's sensory....
excellent work, as always, my friend.
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b1gfan Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2010  Student Writer
A tense and choppy sensory flow - that's precisely what I was angling for :hug:

There are so many ways we lose lives round these parts, no? Too many. Even our own at times.

A :heart: and a big :hug: all for you my friend.
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blackpearleyes Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2010   General Artist
I second the previous commenter.

Where is the world
where the world is?



Incredibly powerful ending.
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b1gfan Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2010  Student Writer
Thank you Noelle. ;P You are the very soul of kindness.

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blackpearleyes Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2010   General Artist
Just calling it how I see it. : )

It's nice to see you posting again. You were gone for awhile there.
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b1gfan Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2010  Student Writer
It's been a busy few months to say the least - I'm just taking it slow and doing my best for now. :) But hopefully I'll be back more n more. :hug:
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blackpearleyes Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2010   General Artist
: ) Looking forward to that.

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msklystron Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2010  Professional Digital Artist
That last question caught in my throat. The language and flow in this poem is breathless and truncated with mostly short, anglo-saxon words... like gunshots.

If only those responsible could read this.:/
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b1gfan Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2010  Student Writer
Awwww...thank you my friend. How I treasure the time you give to such efforts as these :D :glomp:
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msklystron Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2010  Professional Digital Artist
It was my pleasure! I wish I had far more time to hang around your gallery.:D
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