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Pilgrim ant –
          my decision to spray
                    the baseboard by the bed
                              earlier today

                       has kept you from

                             returning home
                        the way you came, is
             keeping you now in a room
  I didn’t want

          to see you in

               in the first place,
         leaving me no choice
             but to reach down I guess
                   and dispatch you

                             with a thumb and some words

                   that don’t really mean
             forever.
©2008-2009 *b1gfan
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Author's Comments

Just a mistake in judgment, followed by another.

Dave Prisk

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:iconsara-bella-snowwhite:
hehe. This was a nice poem. Great job!
:iconb1gfan:
Thanks :D That's very kind of you to say :hug:
:icondamina:
I liked it. I'm not a fan of words all over the paper, but it reminded me of an ant trail. Not sure if you were going for that, but I very much enjoyed your poem ;)

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:iconb1gfan:
I don't dig words across a page either :D but in this case the trail was the suggestion and so I thought I'd see how that worked/looked.

:hug:
:iconb1gfan:
Thanks much Shane, my brutha :D
:iconpardonm3:
Oh, poor ant.
Great ending. :nod:
:iconb1gfan:
My humble thanks go out to you :D

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