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Bent Cold


bent cold       as
church bells climbing a trellis
      of fog and the smell          
                     of hammer on head
     of copper nail –
                               of clouds rushed ragged
        as wheat stubble strewn wild by a brazen sky
             and the bustle
                                   of tongueless wasps
             come to sing blood songs
        in the fork of a pecan tree – songs
             of how a life must live on,
                how a life must rise to find its riot, how
          it cannot remain under the uncounted
    leaves falling into the mud of a rugged path
because that would be proof
                that the day is
for Giuliana :iconpoetatriste:

I wasn't going to post this yet because I thought I might still be messing with it, but she asked for a little something. Maybe this is good enough to be a little something.

Maybe something is all we need. :D

OF
1. expressing the relationship between a part and a whole 2. expressing the relationship between a scale or measure and a value 3. indicating an association between two entities, typically one of belonging 4. expressing a relationship between a direction and a point of reference 5. expressing the relationship between a general category and the thing being specified which belongs to such a category 6. indicating the material or substance constituting something

Dave Prisk
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Earl-of-Slander Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2008
Curse you! Why must you end such a magnificent poem on a cliff-hanger!
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b1gfan Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2008  Student Writer
Well,....it loops back to start over if you want to read it that way..."This Is Suddenly About" and "that" employ the same structure (in my gallery) :) You are very kind to compliment it so :D
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Setzuo Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2008  Hobbyist Digital Artist
wow man..... ife is much more than any human could ever make it to be, huh?

Beautiful piece.
I'm writing something to correspond with this one.

Hope you don't mind. Won't stop me, either way.
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b1gfan Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2008  Student Writer
I don't mind at all - I look forward to it for sure!! And thank you for the :+fav:
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nakedxsnapex Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2008
FUCKING AWESOME! ULTIMATE SUCCESS!
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b1gfan Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2008  Student Writer
I am always thrilled to be able to get close to the Epic Win experience :D
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nakedxsnapex Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2008
hahaha! WELL TODAY'S YOUR LUCKY DAY!
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swallowbastion Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2008
Absolutely wonderful imagery. It's so vivid. Great idea to amplify the imagery through the placemnet of the poems's lines.
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b1gfan Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2008  Student Writer
Thank you Faye :D I was hoping to work it so we could all feel the cold - and to see the relation of each piece to the next in making cold what it is ... all the while working with a speaker that is trying not to get lost in only that :)
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swallowbastion Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2008
You're so welcome. :)
You definitely achieved your goal, Dave.
(I adore poems that deal with the cold and anything related to winter.)
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