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Artifice
"There’s no art to find the mind’s construction in the face."
Macbeth 1.4.13-14



It’s not that crows
and orioles might take us
all; not that they will

set upon us in terrible clouds,
ripping into our carpentry
until brood and queen lay ruined –

all because the drones
who guard our hive are stingless.
It’s not that I’m quick

to throw off the last of my time
when still some gathering is left
for me. It’s not any of that.

The drone’s way does not fail
so that I must lift myself
yellow-masked into his life,

leaving others to live my own.
Neither deception nor insight,
there is only this:

under the sky and its fever
(and what is there but sky
and fever for these few

busy weeks) everything is
a task necessary and needed:
cells to clean, comb to build –

the dead to be removed.
As ever, there is just
what must be done.

If the world were only flowers –
but of course not. So, if
the drone’s mild face is

too easily read –
how it invites a beak
closer, to nip short

his unthreatening watch –
there can be a moment or two
made for painting myself

what I am not: defenseless,
unready. There is a little time,
a place in the sky –

giving myself to this.
©2009 *b1gfan
:iconb1gfan:

Author's Comments

So a while back I heard this bit on NPR about female carpenter bees and their willingness to engage in deception and I couldn't help it - it stuck with me and I just had to write about it. Those crazy bees, ya' know :D.

Carpenter Bees: Sneaky

Orlove says that a female carpenter bee will sometimes disguise herself as a male.

"The male has big yellow spot in the middle of his forehead that distinguishes him from the female who has a black face. And orioles and crows learn very quickly that they can eat these yellow faced bees without getting stung, because the male lacks a stinging apparatus."

Sometimes when a male bee that typically guards the nest is away, a female bee may disguise herself and take up his position.

"A female will go out and get yellow pollen on her face, so she looks remarkably male-like, and then hover like a territorial male."

And then, any bird that approaches the nest may get a nasty surprise, because the female carpenter bee can sting.

"The only reason that I can think this happens is to train the birds not to go after the males."

You can read it all for yourself right here: [link]

If you want to checkout a sweeeeeet image of an oriole and a bee (honey though, not carpenter) peep this: [link]

6/10 Overflowing with dissatisfaction, I did a significant reshuffle of the first five stanzas.

Here's what used to be:

The drone’s way is not such a failure
that I must lift myself
yellow-masked into his life;

I would not so easily leave my own
to others. And it’s not for fear
that crows and orioles might take us

all; that they will
set upon us in terrible clouds,
ripping into our nest until

brood and queen lay ruined –
all because the drones’ defense
of our hive is unbarbed.

It’s not that I’m quick
to throw off the last of my time
when still some gathering is left

for me. It’s not any of that.
Neither deception nor insight,
there is only this:

that under the sky and its fever
(and what is there but sky
and fever for these few...

Hmmmmm...

Dave Prisk

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:iconpoetatriste:
clever clever ladies

--
"How wonderful that we have met with a paradox. Now we have some hope of making progress."
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"Every great and deep difficulty bears in itself its own solution. It forces us to change our thinking in order to find it."
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-Niels Bohr.
:icondark-lotusgirl:
how very witty :)

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"...A frenzied passion for art is a canker that devours everything else..." -Charles Baudelaire :heart:
:iconxabiche:
A good foundation IS the most important thing in any makeover. Pity, though, that so much of the time it does attract unwanted suitors. :lmao:

--
First snow, then silence.
This thousand-dollar screen dies
So beautifully.
:icontworoads:
I concur with a comment above--you have such clever ideas and get inspiration from sources most wouldn't. Just a neat poem and I can't help but love the Macbeth introduction. ;) Wonderful, Dave.


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i'm a million different people from one day to the next.


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:iconottersandsky:
I love the ending. It feels like it finally comes to rest.
:iconr-mitchell:
"If the world were only flowers –
but of course not."
strangely tragic.
:iconaqua-rat:
I really enjoyed being taken into the mind and world of a bee.

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THIS IS THE GATE OF HEAVEN. ENTER YE ALL BY THIS DOOR. (This door is kept locked because of the draught - please use side door.)
:iconprofessor-kirby:
I was going to paste the lines I thought were best, but I realized that that would require me pasting the whole poem. It's woven together in such a tight story that one can't really pull lines out.

(Oh, and I'll have you know that I'm absolutely terrified by bees or the thought of bees, but was intrigued by this trip inside their psyche.) It brought me precariously close to tears.

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:snowflake: :snowflake: :snowflake:
:iconsober-irish-guy:
Before reading the description I couldn't read the poem.

But now I get it.

...and nature's a bit scarier to me now.
:iconseekingmysoul:
Wonderful I really enjoy your writing, so creative :)

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Bursting out from the ashes, with wings of flames that fly
I am called the Phoenix...A mythical bird that flies

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